Writing Craft: Body Language in Dialogue Scenes
A guest post from Rayne Hall.
Body language can add another dimension to your dialogue scene, because it reveals a person's intentions, feelings or mood.
The five main types of body language are gesture, posture, movement, facial expression and tone of voice.
Gesture Examples
She pointed to the orchard. “I saw him there.”
He slammed his fist on the table. “I've had enough.”
She scratched her chin. “Are you sure this will work?”
“Welcome.” He pointed to the couch. “Why don't you make yourself comfortable?”
Posture Examples
She raised her chin. “You can't make me do this.”
He locked his arms across his chest. “No way.”
She leant away from him. “This isn't working between us.”
“I consider this an insult.” He stood with his shoulders squared and his legs braced. “Take it back.”
Movement Examples
“Maybe another time.” He turned to leave.
She walked faster. “I told you I don't want a date.”
“All right.” He shuffled forward.
“Follow me!” She leaped across the brook.
Facial Expression Examples
Her eyes narrowed. “You expect me to believe this?”
His cheeks turned tomato-red. “What do you mean?”
“I'm sorry.” She stared at the floor. “I didn't want it to be this way.”
The corners of his eyes crinkled, and his lips twitched. “Really?”
Tone of Voice Examples
“We will stand together in this.” His voice was deep and resonant like a church bell.
“I've told you a hundred times, and I'm telling you again.” Her voice sounded like a dentist's drill, high-pitched and persistent. “Why don't you ever listen?”
“You know that I'm going to kill you, don't you?” His sounded as casual as if he were discussing the weather. “Do you prefer a shot in the heart, or the head?”
“You've been with that floozy again, you cheating bastard!” Her voice was loud enough to wake up the whole neighbourhood.
Body Language instead of Dialogue Tags
Using body language allows you to cut boring dialogue tags (he said, she asked, he answered) because it shows who's talking.
Tag versions:
“What about the girl?” he asked.
“Bastards!” she shouted. “I won't let you get away with this.”
“What now?” he wondered aloud.
Body language versions:
He jerked his chin at her. “What about the girl?”
“Bastards!” She slammed her fist on the table. “I won't let you get away with this.”
He scratched his head. “What now?”
Point of View
Most people aren't aware of their body language. Therefore, use body language for the character who is not the PoV.
If the body language is intentional, for example gestures, you can use it for PoV and non-PoV characters.
Lies and Secrets
Advanced writers can use body language to hint at secrets and lies. The characters' words say one thing, but their body language another.
“Yes, tell me the rest of your life story, it's so exciting.” She glanced at her watch. “It's a pleasure to hear all about it.”
He hugged his arms around his chest. “I'm not frightened.”
His face paled. “That's all right, honey. It doesn't matter at all.”
If a character avoids eye-contact, this suggests that they're not telling the truth or are hiding a secret.
“Don't wait with dinner for me tonight, darling. Arabella and I will have to work late again.” He did not meet Sue's eyes. “It's a bore, but the workload is getting heavier every day.”
Rayne Hall has published more than forty books under different pen names with different publishers in different genres, mostly fantasy, horror and non-fiction. Recent books include Storm Dancer (dark epic fantasy novel), 13 British Horror Stories, Six Scary Tales Vol 1, 2, 3, 4 (creepy horror stories), Six Historical Tales (short stories), Six Quirky Tales (humorous fantasy stories), Writing Fight Scenes, The World-Loss Diet, Writing About Villains, Writing About Magic and Writing Scary Scenes (instructions for authors).
She holds a college degree in publishing management and a masters degree in creative writing. Currently, she edits the Ten Tales series of multi-author short story anthologies: Bites: Ten Tales of Vampires, Haunted: Ten Tales of Ghosts, Scared: Ten Tales of Horror, Cutlass: Ten Tales of Pirates, Beltane: Ten Tales of Witchcraft, Spells: Ten Tales of Magic, Undead: Ten Tales of Zombies and more.
Rayne has lived in Germany, China, Mongolia and Nepal and has now settled in a small dilapidated town of former Victorian grandeur on the south coast of England.
The five main types of body language are gesture, posture, movement, facial expression and tone of voice.
Gesture Examples
She pointed to the orchard. “I saw him there.”
He slammed his fist on the table. “I've had enough.”
She scratched her chin. “Are you sure this will work?”
“Welcome.” He pointed to the couch. “Why don't you make yourself comfortable?”
Posture Examples
She raised her chin. “You can't make me do this.”
He locked his arms across his chest. “No way.”
She leant away from him. “This isn't working between us.”
“I consider this an insult.” He stood with his shoulders squared and his legs braced. “Take it back.”
Movement Examples
“Maybe another time.” He turned to leave.
She walked faster. “I told you I don't want a date.”
“All right.” He shuffled forward.
“Follow me!” She leaped across the brook.
Facial Expression Examples
Her eyes narrowed. “You expect me to believe this?”
His cheeks turned tomato-red. “What do you mean?”
“I'm sorry.” She stared at the floor. “I didn't want it to be this way.”
The corners of his eyes crinkled, and his lips twitched. “Really?”
Tone of Voice Examples
“We will stand together in this.” His voice was deep and resonant like a church bell.
“I've told you a hundred times, and I'm telling you again.” Her voice sounded like a dentist's drill, high-pitched and persistent. “Why don't you ever listen?”
“You know that I'm going to kill you, don't you?” His sounded as casual as if he were discussing the weather. “Do you prefer a shot in the heart, or the head?”
“You've been with that floozy again, you cheating bastard!” Her voice was loud enough to wake up the whole neighbourhood.
Body Language instead of Dialogue Tags
Using body language allows you to cut boring dialogue tags (he said, she asked, he answered) because it shows who's talking.
Tag versions:
“What about the girl?” he asked.
“Bastards!” she shouted. “I won't let you get away with this.”
“What now?” he wondered aloud.
Body language versions:
He jerked his chin at her. “What about the girl?”
“Bastards!” She slammed her fist on the table. “I won't let you get away with this.”
He scratched his head. “What now?”
Point of View
Most people aren't aware of their body language. Therefore, use body language for the character who is not the PoV.
If the body language is intentional, for example gestures, you can use it for PoV and non-PoV characters.
Lies and Secrets
Advanced writers can use body language to hint at secrets and lies. The characters' words say one thing, but their body language another.
“Yes, tell me the rest of your life story, it's so exciting.” She glanced at her watch. “It's a pleasure to hear all about it.”
He hugged his arms around his chest. “I'm not frightened.”
His face paled. “That's all right, honey. It doesn't matter at all.”
If a character avoids eye-contact, this suggests that they're not telling the truth or are hiding a secret.
“Don't wait with dinner for me tonight, darling. Arabella and I will have to work late again.” He did not meet Sue's eyes. “It's a bore, but the workload is getting heavier every day.”
About Rayne Hall
Rayne Hall has published more than forty books under different pen names with different publishers in different genres, mostly fantasy, horror and non-fiction. Recent books include Storm Dancer (dark epic fantasy novel), 13 British Horror Stories, Six Scary Tales Vol 1, 2, 3, 4 (creepy horror stories), Six Historical Tales (short stories), Six Quirky Tales (humorous fantasy stories), Writing Fight Scenes, The World-Loss Diet, Writing About Villains, Writing About Magic and Writing Scary Scenes (instructions for authors).She holds a college degree in publishing management and a masters degree in creative writing. Currently, she edits the Ten Tales series of multi-author short story anthologies: Bites: Ten Tales of Vampires, Haunted: Ten Tales of Ghosts, Scared: Ten Tales of Horror, Cutlass: Ten Tales of Pirates, Beltane: Ten Tales of Witchcraft, Spells: Ten Tales of Magic, Undead: Ten Tales of Zombies and more.
Rayne has lived in Germany, China, Mongolia and Nepal and has now settled in a small dilapidated town of former Victorian grandeur on the south coast of England.
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