NaNoWriMo Tip #19: 7 Signs Your Book Is The Wrong Length...and How To Fix it
Seven Signs Your Book Is Going To Be Too Long or Too Short...
1. Your outline
calls for 3 scenes of set-up, but it’s turned into 9 scenes…and you hero has
still not even answered the call to adventure yet.
2. Several scenes you thought would take up
whole chapters each have turned out to work better as a paragraph or even a
line of summary. (“The mule caravan arrived at the ford by spring.”)
3. A new character turned up who wasn’t in your
outline.
4. A minor character has proven more important
than you realized.
5. You added or
dropped a subplot.
6. Your scenes are running a lot longer or
shorter than you expected.
7. You’re halfway
through the outline of what should be a 70,000 word book but only have 10,000
words.
...And How To Fix It
Now let’s get to
solutions. Not surprisingly, Too Short and Too Long are mirror image problems,
so the solutions are interrelated. Length is primarily controlled by five
things.
Subtasks
Is your hero
driving the story or sitting around passively waiting and worrying about stuff?
After your hero accepts the call to action, your hero should be constantly
driving the story toward the main goal.
If Your Book Is Too
Short: If the story is moving toward the end too rapidly, in a boring and
linear fashion, you might need more Sub-Tasks. These are things your hero needs
to do to reach the final goal. However, they must be exciting and important in
their own right, not superfluous distractions. Brainstorm more Sub-Tasks as
needed and add these to your outline to make sure they fit into the larger
story arc before you commit to them.
A related problem
is that your protagonist might not be interesting enough. Show another side of
her through a Subtask or Subplot (more about those below).
If Your Book Is Too
Long: If the story is meandering and the hero is not making progress toward the
main goal, you may have included too many
Sub-Tasks. Does the hero really need to find all Seven Magic Gems? How about
only Three?
Look for things to
cut. Candidates are any scenes which don’t directly contribute to the main
story goal, journey scenes and “boring” scenes.
Subplots
There are two kinds
of Subplots. In one kind, the protagonist is pursuing another goal in addition
to the main story goal. For example, the hero’s main goal is to win an Olympic
race. A subplot is his goal to win the heart of a runner on a rival team. Or
take the governess hired to look after the daughter of a duke. The main plot is
heroine’s winning the romantic affections of the duke. The subplot is the
heroine’s winning the familial affections of his daughter.
The other kind of
subplot involves characters besides the protagonist. For example, the hero is
an eremitic monk who has come out of his ascetic solitude to play detective and
exonerate a fellow monk accused of murder. The subplot is story of the Venetian
princeling who hired him to marry the daughter of a political rival and avoid
assassination by his rivals. In Initiate, the first book of The Unfinished
Song, the main plot revolves around the heroine’s attempts to pass her
Initiation and become a Tavaedi (magic warrior-dancer). Subplots involve the
hero’s exile, a mother trying to protect her daughters, and a mysterious woman
who lost her memory (told in flashbacks).
The key to
effective subplots is that although they seem irrelevant at first to the main
plot, they always tie into it by the end.
If Your Book Is Too
Short: Add subplots. Add a McGuffin, a mystery or a relationship. Count up how
many characters your protagonist has important relationships with so far. If
it’s only two—the romance and the villain—or less, then there’s room for more. The
relationship doesn’t have to be a romance either. It could be a friend, a
roommate, an ex, an authority figure. To make sure you’re not just filling
pages with Yawn, give the other person in the relationship a conflict with your
protagonist. Use this relationship and this conflict to show another side of
your protagonist.
If Your Book Is Too
Long: Subtract or contract subplots. I know it’s hard, if you’ve set up also
sort of delicious side-stories, to snipe them out of the picture. Here’s the
secret to painlessly cutting Excess Subplot: Keep It For Later. A later book in
the series, a new set of characters in some other series, a stand-alone short
story, a novella tie-in to your main book. Nothing need be lost. Keep telling
yourself that…then cut.
Scene and Summary
Scene is “showing.”
Summary is “telling.” I won’t elaborate here because you can find lots about
the difference between these too. If you’re not sure of it, definitely study
up, although be aware there’s a lot of dumb advice around “Show Don’t Tell.”
Sometimes it messes you up more than it helps.
If Your Book Is Too
Short: You may be conveying too much of your book through Summary rather than
Scene. Look over your novel and see if you’ve skimmed over any potentially
juicy scenes. It’s also possible that you’re writing too many “white room”
scenes that are almost entirely dialogue, with no sense of setting.
If Your Book Is Too
Long: You may be conveying too much of your book through Scene rather than
Summary. Believe it or not, sometimes it IS better to Tell than to Show. See if
some scenes can be reduced to a line or paragraph of summary at the beginning
of the next scene or somewhere else, and cut the fat. You may also be overexplaining.
Do you tell the reader what your going to tell them, show them, and then tell
them what your going to tell them? Do your characters plan their actions in one
scene, worry about whether their plan will work in the next scene, carry out
the actions as they planned or fail they worried, and then talk about it or
think or fret about it afterward? If so, you can probably cut all but one of
those scenes. Don’t bore your reader with repetition.
Cast of Characters
It’s a simple rule:
The more major characters you have, the longer the story needs to be. This is
especially true if you have multiple PoV characters.
If Your Book Is Too
Short: Add a character, or give a minor character a bigger role. Adding a
character has the benefit of usually involving more Subtasks or Subplots.
If Your Book Is Too
Long: Remove a character, reduce a major character to a minor role or combine
two different characters into one. Cutting a character is often the easiest way
to cut excess Subtasks or Subplots.
Passage of Time
The more time
passes in your novel, the harder it is to flow smoothly across chapters. That’s
because scenes take place in a sort of imagined “real time,” which isn’t real
at all, but necessarily contains a certain heft and pace. If you skip ten years
between chapters two and three and another year between chapters nine and ten,
it’s going to be tricky. Skilled writers can do it, and some stories require
it, but be aware it can play havoc with the wordcount of your novel as you
wrestle with it. This is related, but subtly different from the problem of
Scene vs. Summary.
If Your Book Is Too
Short: Are you skipping too much time? Do you skim over long intervals of
things like, “Over the next six months I learned fluent Spanish and earned
black belts in five martial arts. At last, I was ready to take down the Yakuza
gang that killed Grandma.” Consider showing some of this time in Scene.
If Your Book Is Too
Long: Do you have your characters onstage too often in an effort to show time
passing? Waiting, studying, journeying, empty dialogue, waking up, going to
sleep, eating at feasts where no one is poisoned, these may all show the
passage of time, but not in a good way. Skip more.
Important note:
Whether your book
is too short or too long, it can benefit from cutting boring scenes. Even the
shortest book is too long if it’s a drag to read.
Boring scenes are
usually there because the plot “requires” them, for info-dumping, setting the
mood, reaction shots or moving characters around, but they are… boring. Target
scenes that involve nothing beyond your protagonist worrying, waiting,
travelling or planning. Look for the nugget of necessary information or action
contained in the scene—the reason you allowed it into your manuscript or
outline in the first place. Then extract that nugget and place it into another
scene, combine two boring scenes into one more interesting scene, or just cut
it altogether.
Or turn a boring
scene into a thrilling scene. More on that later.
Finally, if all
else fails, if you’ve scoured your book and don’t want to add or cut a
thing, rename your Too Short novel a novella, or split your Too Long book into
two books. Voila! Now it’s the perfect length!
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